When an individual takes steroids illegally, it is typically done to increase muscle mass. As part of this process, testosterone is given. Testosterone pills are used to provide the body with an extra hormone that stimulates muscle growth without exercise. The excess hormones will help increase muscle mass and strength in a short period. This also means that other human body parts are affected if certain levels are not controlled properly. Using testosterone can cause many adverse side effects such as:
* Baldness
* Uncontrollable anger
* Deepening of voice
* Enlargement of the clitoris for women or breasts for men
* Increased oily skin
* Acne-like symptoms
* Heart attack
* Stroke
* Promoting the growth of cancerous cells.
“Using testosterone can cause many negative side effects such as deepening of the voice, enlargement of the clitoris for women or breasts for men, increased oily skin, acne-like symptoms, heart attack, and stroke.”
The article states that testosterone pills “can cause many negative side effects” but not list any. To say something is “uncontrollable anger” is to ascribe an emotion to the subject without demonstrating it. Furthermore, since this statement fails to give any examples, it has no explanatory power about the issue at hand. Therefore I propose that this sentence be eliminated from the text.
The article also claims that using steroids will result in specific physical ailments like baldness and changes in hormone levels. However, baldness is not a direct result of using testosterone and does not fall under “negative side effects.” Therefore, I propose we omit this statement from the article.
“The excess hormones will help increase muscle mass and strength in a short period.”
This sentence fails to give specific examples of possible changes that might occur due to using testosterone pills. Instead, it simply claims that “excess hormones” help create increased muscle mass without describing those hormones or how they work, nor mentioning how long it takes for these effects to manifest themselves. Therefore, I propose this sentence be replaced with one more descriptive about muscle growth potential.
“This also means that other parts of the human body are affected if certain levels are not controlled properly.”
The article implies that using testosterone pills might affect other parts of the human body but does not give any details materializing this claim. Therefore, I propose we change this sentence to say something like, “this also means that the use of testosterone can cause some other effects on different parts of the human body.”
“Using testosterone can cause many negative side effects such as baldness, uncontrollable anger, deepening of the voice, enlargement of the clitoris for women or breasts for men, increased oily skin, acne-like symptoms, heart attack, and stroke.”
“When an individual takes steroids illegally, it is typically done to increase muscle mass. Testosterone is given as part of this process. Testosterone pills are used to give the body extra hormones that stimulate muscle growth without exercise. The excess hormones will help increase muscle mass and strength in a short period.”
“The article states that testosterone pills can cause many negative side effects but does not list any. To say something is uncontrollable anger is to ascribe an emotion to the subject without demonstrating it. Furthermore, since this statement fails to give any examples, it has no explanatory power about the issue at hand.”
“This also means that other parts of the human body are affected if certain levels are not controlled properly.”
“Using testosterone can cause baldness for men and enlargement of the clitoris for women or breasts for men, heart attack and stroke.”
“Using testosterone pills can cause some other effects on different parts of the human body.”